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Post by -sira- on Jun 27, 2011 21:47:30 GMT -8
Please place the comments here. To avoid flooding before the next chapter. Is that alright? ;3 it's one of my biggest pet peeves.
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Post by reeddragon on Jul 6, 2011 14:57:38 GMT -8
It's an interesting story so far. ^.^ Just a couple things, though. First, personal preference and you can ignore this if you don't like it, but I would break the paragraphs up a bit more. That would make it easier to read. Second, maybe it's my eyes but you seem to have called the pixie Nari and Navi.
Have you, by any chance, played The Legend of Zelda: Ocarina of Time?
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Post by -sira- on Jul 7, 2011 21:18:08 GMT -8
Goodness... Thank you for the suggestions! And the iPad allows itself to correct when it feels like it. I didn't noticed I had given myself two different names. I will fix it! Thanks for reading it (:
And I had only watched bits and pieces. But not enough for me to remember. Why?
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Post by reeddragon on Jul 7, 2011 21:21:46 GMT -8
My pleasure. ^.^ And I ask because the hero of the game has a fairy named Navi. It reminded me a bit of her.
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